Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
Empty and Dark
This place stays the same
Never getting better
I can't escape this game

Feelings of falling
But hitting no ground
I think as cry
I will never be found

My body is getting weak
I can't stand it no more
I wish this would end
I'm walking out this door

Stop the pounding
Stop the pain
Stop the pressure in my brain
Stop the torture
Stop this game
I cant make it to the end
Just don't forget my name
This is my Second try at some poetry. Might be crappy but lets give it a shot.
Add a Comment:
 
:iconkeeraliestarflight:
KeeralieStarflight Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2014  Student
This sounds like a really cool concept! Although you really don't know exactly what the speaker is talking about, the mysterious feeling is really cool! (I'm so terrible at writing comments... XD) Anyways, great job here! 
Reply
:iconbonfire82:
bonfire82 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks :D It honestly just comes out like this and I dont do much editing. I like leaving it the way my brain wrote it. More feels!
Reply
:iconreyjjj:
ReyJJJ Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I hope you don't take offense to this, but this sounds like it would make a great clean rap song.
Reply
:iconbonfire82:
bonfire82 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks :) No offence at all. Im actually working on turning this into a song. I was thinking rap, hardcore, or blues.
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×

:iconbonfire82: More from bonfire82


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
August 1, 2014
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
145
Favourites
4 (who?)
Comments
4

License

Creative Commons License
Some rights reserved. This work is licensed under a
Creative Commons Attribution-Noncommercial-No Derivative Works 3.0 License.
×